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Witch War - Prolog. (Test)

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This is just to see what people think about the idea im working on. I want to know what you think about this story, and if this is something you want to see more of. I also want to know whatever you think I need a Beta writer or not. Beta writer is one that fixs all spelling errors and so on... The story will be updated, and most likly removed later for the Orginal version. This is just an small part of what will most likly become Chapter 1. Hope you like it!


The Cave was blazing.

The cave walls, the ground and everything in there were all burning ferociously.

The sound of collapsing stones where mixed with the sound of boiling water.

The ferocious blaze could be seen from a long distance out from the caves opening making the night sky light up.

The cave where almost filled with smoke and they were almost completely dark. In this smothering darkness, were only the flickering light of the fire provided some light.

The girl was depending on this faint light to see anything.

After a while, her expression slowly became less tense.

The smoke around her was not thick anymore, and she could clearly see where the smoke was going.

As long as she passed the same way, she would be able to see the exit. And be saved from the complete darkness.

She was Wounded, But able to walk forward when she suddenly stopped.

She could see by the light of the blazing fire, a figure walked slowly towards her.

It was a woman, wearing old and burned clothing.

"So you were still alive, Mom."

She said as she followed the lady as she where walking towards her.

"You have become strong..."

The woman smiled holding her left hand on bleeding wound on her stomach.

In her right hand was she holding a piece of old paper.

"It won’t be long before I going to lose my consciousness again, so take this."

The woman throws the piece of paper to her, smiling with tears in her eyes.

"What are you doing, Mom, let`s escape together."

The words of persuasion from the girl to the woman stopped, because she noticed as the woman approached her, the woman’s hand started to rise.

In her hand, there was a small fire, growing in size.

Then the Fire, that was made to kill, shot towards the girl.

Feeling the Impact on her right shoulder, the girl couldn’t help but scream.

"Mom...!"

She looked at the burned skin on her shoulder.

The skin gave off a nauseating smell be the fire, and she collapsed.

"W-why..."

The girl looked at the woman with an expression of fear.

But she didn`t reply, she only raised her hand and a new fire come out. The girl just manages to block it with some water that she controlled from the ground.

Even though this happen, the woman`s expression did not change.

"I am sorry, mom."

With her last strength a ring of fire open around the woman, and a wall of fire raised from the circle. As you could see the body starting to melt, some last words got out from the mouth.

"Thank you my daughter, the paper will tell you what you need to know..."

It was only black dust remaining of the woman’s body as the fire stopped.

She threw aside the paper, picked some stones rolling on the ground, and laid it on the remaining dust. Crying be the pain and emotion fillings.

The pungent smell of burned skin started to permeate the air as the girl left the cave without looking back.

She then disappeared into the darkness of the night, carried the piece of paper in her right hand.

The night air was rent be the smell of smoke.


What you think? :P
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keanove's avatar
wow... another wonderful story ^^
as far... I can see that this will be a great story... 
This is 1st chapter and still too short (cause still small part hehehe...)...But, I can say that this will be awesome and nice opening chapter >w<